Your eyes capture the soul of the oceans
for i tend to sink in the abyss of your eyes
when our hearts meet, our ends do too
your touch puts me in a deep slumber
for in my sleep, i see your dreams
we may be fathoms apart, but still
the winds carry your scent to me,
for all i seek is, you don’t forget
what i have not forgotten
I know you smile for me, somewhere
‘cause this breeze envelops your love for me
for i had forgotten how to love,
you came back to remind me.
for i tend to sink in the abyss of your eyes
when our hearts meet, our ends do too
your touch puts me in a deep slumber
for in my sleep, i see your dreams
we may be fathoms apart, but still
the winds carry your scent to me,
for all i seek is, you don’t forget
what i have not forgotten
I know you smile for me, somewhere
‘cause this breeze envelops your love for me
for i had forgotten how to love,
you came back to remind me.
16 comments:
everything i say would be short. brilliant! masterpiece!
yaar seriously this was brilliant...
really good work!!
reminded me of Pablo Neruda's "A girl lithe and tawny". definitely a commendable effort...
awesomeness pohm-ified!!!
@ sim: thanks a lot bro, your comments always motivate me!..
@ abhi: thanks a lot for reading yaar!!
@anwesa: its always feels good to receive positive reviews from a good blogger.... thanks a lot for checking out my blog!
@jumper:haha glad u liked it!!! :)
What???!!! Only 5 comments??? DUDE!!! With this pohm you should be getting letters from oxford university press or something!!!
hey gokka bugger!!! i lik all ur poems..dey r awesome...way to go dude..:) de gud part being, u deal wit common emotions, which makes it simpler for the person reading it to relate to them, and second ur poems leave de reader with de mood of the poem...de effect being sufficient enough for the reader to appreciate de intensity with which u ve written dem...!!:) super cool be deathsoul!!! :)
now leave me a thank u messege!!! lol!!!:p
n yeah...i shall visit ur blog more often now..:) muah!!!
thanks a lot kokka..... i was missing your comment a lot on my blog..... haha good to see "my old is gold" here!!! ;).....
SOCCER KO BAHUT SARI BANDIYAN MILEGE...
AUR ME AAPKO TAN MAN DHAN SE LOVE KARTI HU....
d poem is ...
B E A U T I F U L ... :)
@swati: ulchoo.... aap apne naam se kyon nahi bolte!!! :)
@abhinav: thanks for reading dude, i thought u were the "abhi" who commented on this post earlier....
@abhi: sry i don't recognize you, if u ever read this then please identify yourself... ;) sry again
awesome..very very cool..ha ha..jokes apart..great thought put into ur poem..its awsm as usual..it ws nice reading..th best thng is i feel a thng whn i read ur poems..nice 1 agn..
oye...!!! either put some new poem on ur blog or change your status message...
hmmm... never knew this side of u :):) these deeply touching words can just bring inner happiness to anyone .. very impressive :):)
This touches me deeply. She came back to remind me too, and then she left. Those eyes...
@ anupam: thanks a ton bro!!!
@ sandhya: really nice to see you here!!! :D
@legacy2000: thanks a lot.... and i know love hurts...:)... but that sadness is the best part about it, makes you feel alive.... doesn't it!! :D
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